argyle sweater + smile ([info]ronsard) wrote,
@ 2006-09-02 12:42:00
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Current mood: awake but cannot open my eyes
Current music:rilo kiley - a better son/daughter
Entry tags:fic, naruto, sasunaru, slash

[fic] Children At Play, In Charcoal
Title: Children At Play, In Charcoal
Rating: R
Pairing: Naruto/Sasuke
Challenge: 'Friends', at [info]sasunaru100
Disclaimer: Naruto is the property of Kishimoto Masashi.






Children at Play, In Charcoal

*


one, two, buckle my shoe

~

And how did it begin?

With a broken sandal strap.

Sasuke would have successfully thrown off his pursuers if it hadn’t been for the broken sandal strap. Half-an-inch of frayed leather led to a two-inch tear led to a nanosecond of – not tripping per se – temporary loss of agility.

Which ultimately led to his present predicament – lying nosedown in a pile of musky foliage – and the unfortunate incident of a smug-faced Naruto standing over him.

“Got you, friend,” Naruto triumphs, pulling up his ANBU mask.

In some cultures, a broken sandal strap is interpreted as a sign of bad luck.

*

three, four, knock on the door

~

In another culture that Sasuke knows nothing about, a broken sandal strap portends an unstoppable chain of events.

He does know this: Naruto won’t let him be.

“Leave!” Sasuke yells through the door.

“No!” Naruto yells back from the other side. “Not until you explain why you disappeared after Itachi died! Why you wouldn’t fucking stay!”

Eventually, however, his patience wins out and Naruto exits the building, stormy-eyed.

Sasuke isn’t obsessed, but he goes to the window and parts the Italian blind and stares at his friend’s retreating back anyway.

He tries not to think about how it really began.

*

five, six, pick up sticks

~

Friends bury the hatchet. Real friends will help you bury bodies.

This is how it truly began: with the building of Itachi’s funeral pyre out of twigs and leaves.

It was a case of gross but appropriate irony that Naruto should be the only other witness. Little boys with their toys – him a broken sword and Naruto his fittingly empty hands. The wind picked up; the ashes began to scatter.

And then Naruto leaned over and kissed him. Sasuke could taste the fading contempt under his tongue.

Wreathed in smoke and the smell of burning flesh, it was almost romantic.

*

seven, eight, lay ‘em straight

~

On a grey December morning, Naruto pressed Sasuke back onto the tattered cloak of his late brother. The ground was rough with sharp rocks; a line of pain cut into Sasuke’s back.

It was, all things considered, somewhat morbid.

Sasuke couldn’t have cared less.

Naruto got up and put his hands on Sasuke’s shoulders, and Sasuke went down, down. His jaws cracked, his mouth was hot. Naruto came, muscles taunt like strings on a guitar. Bucked his hips and hauled Sasuke up to finish him.

Sasuke hadn’t blown it yet.

That came later, when he left before Naruto woke up.

*

nine, ten, friends again

~

And how will it end?

With him opening the door.

He has words, his fears in a handful of dust. He could say: ‘Because I’m scared shitless.’ He could say: ‘Because it’s really nice and all when people become lovers even before they’ve stopped being friends/enemies, but it never ends well.’

Instead, he says: “You disarm me.”

Naruto’s grin is threatening to break his face, and Sasuke watches in fascination as it curls and curves over his mouth. “So are we good?”

Sasuke blinks. “We’re good.”

Naruto nods, and grabs his arm. They go to town.

And that is that.

*

catch a tiger by the toe
if he hollers, let him go



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[info]alittlesilent
2006-09-02 06:20 am UTC (link)
I was about to complain about the exact OPPOSITE. XD Oh god, I was so annoyed when I found at leaset twice as much ItaNaru doujinshi than ItaSasu on Ebay. And some more explicit than most. e.e ItaSasu rarely shows even a kiss.

I patrol Ebay and Yahoo!Japan everyday.

Your AUs are worth reading, even if people don't like the pairings. ;)

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[info]alittlesilent
2006-09-02 06:22 am UTC (link)
Make that "at least twice as much ItaNaru doujinshi as.."

It's nearly midnight, my brains are blown to bits. o.x Good luck with the job, and hopefully we'll see you around. =)

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[info]ronsard
2006-09-02 06:25 am UTC (link)
You mean the threesome o' doom? Oh that's not an AU, and yes, that makes it a thousand times worse XD

I don't mean to say there's any lack of ItaNaru. There's plenty of really awful stuff, and that's probably led to the vitriolic reaction from the non-fans. The dearth of love is DEVASTATING >A<

I need to troll Ebay too

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[info]xxlovelyxhatxx
2006-09-02 04:17 pm UTC (link)
Sure there is allot of ItaNaru doujin, but there is a huge lack of ItaNaru fanfiction. (Reading a book > Reading doujin IMHO) Everyone wants to read ItaSasu wehere Itachi is the big bad rapist who only comes to Konoha to rape his brother totally forgetting about Naruto of whom he must capture. Oh, and did I mention that Sasuke suddenly becomes Hinata in 2.05 seconds and he doesn't hate Itachi and he is still twelve? And I used to be a ItaSasu fan. *shudders*

I'm so happy I've seen the light.

I hardly ever read ItaNaru unless it's from Master Franny (a.k.a StarsOfYaoi), or tsubaki_hana. (I would write ItaNaru, but I don't know just *how* to write it... Maybe I should write a TWT.)

I'll shoot you if you start to write KakaSakuYama as long as you promise to shoot me in the head if I write Ibiki/Naruto. (Because it is so going to happen one of these days...)

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[info]ronsard
2006-09-03 07:29 am UTC (link)
But doujin = pretteh ♥

There is no lack of ItaNaru ff in which Itachi eschews his brother in favor of raping the cute little jinchuuriki, I assure you. It's just that you might as well have your brain decanted if you read such crap. But hey, isn't the ff_anbu motto 'standing strong in the face of bad fiction'? ;)

I don't read much of MF anymore. Something about the style doesn't appeal to me any longer. I'll still read anything Alex comes up with, though she's been obsessed with SasaNaru for too long now *glares* I've tried my hand at ItaNaru a few times myself, except I like to come up with inane ideas that get abandoned halfway through, and then Alex has to come poking after me to remind me that, yes, I did in fact promise to discuss plots...

I kinda want some Ibiki/Naruto myself

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[info]xxlovelyxhatxx
2006-09-03 09:31 am UTC (link)
I maybe a FF_Anbu, but I stick to what I know. I mostly ANBU SasuNaru (sometimes KakaNaru) fics, because all know that there is allot of SasuNaru crap fics. (So many fics. So little time...)

Um, I've always had the idea that Itachi was schizoid and the only person he ever had a very close relationship with Sasuke, his mother, and Shisui. So if I ever decide to write a Itachi+Sasuke brother fic I write Itachi to be cold towards Sasuke, because schizoids don't like it when people get into their personal space. It doesn't mean they don't care about you. It's just that they are scared. But down right shunning someone who is in your comfort zone is really weird.

(I'm sticking to my; "Itachi's a schizoid" theory no matter what and that's why Rapist!Itachi scares me more than Rapist!Kakashi.)

So... I'm not the only person who comes up with what seem like good ideas then abandoning them. ZOMG! We start a support group! =D

(We must promise lots of coffe and porn. Insomnia is an author's bestest friend.)

Really? Then shoot me in the head if I write Akamaru/Kiba (Lol, Kiba's Akamaru's bitch).(I am a person of many kinks that does not inculde water-sport and scat. I do have *some* morals.)

I'm sorry, but I must write Ibiki/Naruto BDSM right now.

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[info]na_no_nai
2006-09-02 07:36 pm UTC (link)
Well, you won't hear me complaining about Kakashi/Sakura/Yamato porn. ^_^

Hi there. I'm a new friend but a long-time worshipper.

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[info]ronsard
2006-09-03 07:30 am UTC (link)
Hi ^^ *waves* A fan of doomed threesomes, I see?

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[info]swallowedhalo
2006-09-04 05:27 am UTC (link)
I actually wrote an ItaNaruSasu but I never published it because it's out for betaing...and it's lost?

Haha...I wonder what happened to it?

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[info]ronsard
2006-09-04 05:36 am UTC (link)
Don't you just fucking hate that? >:(

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[info]swallowedhalo
2006-09-04 05:40 am UTC (link)
It's sort of annoying but I guess some people do have lives unlike me... Besides Taes is a great beta so I guess I don't have the right to complain...

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[info]yira_heerai
2006-09-04 06:29 am UTC (link)
I am intrigued to see how you'll end up doing Kakashi/Sakura/Yamato (especially since it's mostly been Kakashi, Naruto, and Yamato that's taken over the manga *shot*.

But yes. ItaNaru needs your touch. *shoos you to it* Love it up, all hands and tounge. It misses you.

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[info]ronsard
2006-09-06 02:15 pm UTC (link)
Yo, you don't have to remind meabout the Naruto Has Two Dirrrty Daddies thing... I'm getting on it next XD

You know what needs our collab love? The puppies! :(

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[info]gigabomb
2006-09-09 06:48 am UTC (link)
Erm... hi. You don't know me, but I browse your journal on occasion and loved your Naruto/Ino fic (coming on sintari's rec) and somehow was able to read your Jiraiya/Naruto fic and not feel like my brain was dying (as it so often does with that sort of pairing), because it read naturally and like something that might actually work, so I applaud your skill.

And though I have absolutely no investment whatsoever in the Itachi/Naruto pairing, you're right about it being so easy to get wrong, and now I sort of want to write it. Even though I'll probably get it horribly wrong too seeing as I've never been able to envision Itachi with anyone but Kisame (Itachi/Sasuke has always been a little too odd for my tastes). Still... I could see how it could work. Thanks. I've been in a fandom rut lately and this post is actually very inspirational.

Also, I've friended you. Please don't kill me for not asking first.

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[info]blu_olivz
2006-11-23 09:03 pm UTC (link)
fear in a handful of dust!

♥ wasteland

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[info]ronsard
2006-11-25 03:48 am UTC (link)
Wasteland indeed! ^^

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